Sunday, December 09, 2007

Goodbye

I have never been very comfortable with poems. I hardly read any. Though off late, I enjoy reading Neha's poems. Couple of days back, I came across this blog by Shreyasi and I read Homecoming. The poem took me back to the memory lane and then I came up with Goodbye.

I think Shreyasi's written a beautiful poem and it deserves a mention again :)

Homecoming

I will leave when you sleep
Quietly, on tip-toes

I will slowly fold the morning light
Wrap the pale sun around me
Push the chill with a coat brush

I will stop for a while to catch a last glimpse
Of sights I have always seen
Or one made uniquely for me

And when am gone
I will wish that you wake up
To see the crease on the armchair seat

I will look down from the porthole
Poring over the matchbox city
To find you in the lap of the beautiful sea

I will leave when you sleep
Quietly, on tip-toes

I'm actually a bit scared for I have never posted a poem before. Please do read the following and leave behind your comments. I need a frank opinion :) Let me know what you think... :)


Goodbye

Blissfully asleep
Deep in my dreams
Completely unaware...that you are leaving.

I think you look at me
Affectionately
and wish you could talk to me
But you go away.

And then when I wake up
My eyes search for you
And I chuckle,
For I know
Playing a game, we are
You remain cleverly hidden.

I ask Amma,
Tells me you've left.
Angry I am
You did not tell me
I rush towards the door
In a hope to see you walking by
but the door knob I can't open...
I sit down and cry
Unable to grapple with my helplessness
I've always hated goodbyes.

8 comments:

IdeaSmith said...

I like it. Shreyasi's poem and yours as well. :-)

Unknown said...

Poignant poem. Definitely evokes the imagination and emotions :)

Shobha said...

Ideasmithy and Manan: Thank you :)

Dusty Fog said...

hey all well i hope....you haven't written in a long while....!!!

Anonymous said...

All's fine :) A very happy new year. I have written couple of posts after this one. Hope u've read them...

Dusty Fog said...

just read them, and well have left a comment too....
Hope you had a good time during new years. Incidentally is the hot chocolate going to happen in the new year or not?!!...: ) before the weather turns from this nice and pleasant cold sensation, to the time when only a beer would suffice...: )

Anonymous said...

What hot chocolate are you talking about? I did not get you...

Malesh Ponnusamy said...

Liked the flow.
At times we are asleep to people around us.